Improving my resume

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New answer on Jun 16, 2020
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Robert asked on Jun 14, 2020

Hi Guys,

I'm currently in the process of applying for consulting. Attached is the resume I'm planning to submit. I'd love to get some final thoughts before I do. What do you guys think? Any advice on how to improve it?

Thank you so much!

Robert

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Ian
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replied on Jun 14, 2020
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Hi there,

I'm sorry but you are being treated too nicely by the other coaches! You clearly have good experience, but your resume is not good (yet) and I would not interview you. However, it can be fixed:

  1. There's too much. Cut down some points that don't matter, as it detracts from the rest
    1. "Language" line under shanghai jiao...it's implied you took courses in chinese AND just list this under skills
    2. Coursework: don't care much
    3. LBS summer school...change it to exchange program or sister school class or something
  2. You sentences are not good
    1. You need to write in shorthand
    2. It's way too personal / casual
    3. You need trigger words
    4. You need the so what
    5. I.e. instead of "Often interviewed by television and radio on Chinese developments, while much of my writing has been featured on the Editors' Picks and Most Popular lists at the newspaper website, www.politiken.dk" Write "Published x featured articles and was conducted x interviews on Chinese developments in xxx, resulting in xxx"
  3. Interests section not right
    1. Should be interests & Skills
    2. Remove your sentences! I don't need all the description...literally just say "Languages: Chinese (Fluent), Spanish (Intermediate)"


​In summary, the biggest issues I see with your resume is 1) It's not a resume and 2) It's too personal / casual

Be much more succinct + direct, say only what matters, and be more professional in your language.

Once you've implemented this, send it over to me and we can talk more. I can also provide you with a perfect template/example from which you can go off of.

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Anonymous replied on Jun 14, 2020

Hi Robert,

CV looks good and is well written. Very impressive achievements - well done!

My first minor recommendation is to try to bring out (or explain) more your analytical achievements:

Example:

  • What was so special about the e-commerce dashboard? did you introduce new KPIs? Did the dashboards allow to make smart trend comparisons/forecasts?
  • The articles you wrote, were there tackling financial/economical topics?

My second minor recommendation is to try to explain in few words the companies you worked for (in case you are applying to a country that are not familiar with CEPOS, Nilfisk, etc.)

I hope this helps.

Best of luck in the process.

Khaled

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Robert on Jun 14, 2020

Hi Khaled, thank you so much for your feedback. I totally agree with your recommendations!

Anonymous replied on Jun 15, 2020

Hello Robert,

If I were you, I would not display my CV like that. Preplounge is a very nice community, but there can always be malicious people. Always better to send it in private. Best

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replied on Jun 15, 2020
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Hello Robert,

I will PM you some suggestions.

Luca

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Antonello
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replied on Jun 16, 2020
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Hi Robert, feel free to text me for detailed feedback

Best,
Antonello

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Clara
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Can´t see it, can u send over?

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Anonymous replied on Jun 16, 2020

Dear Robert,

I would propose to have a quick 30min call that we can discuss your documents and the ways to improve it. Drop me a line.

Best,

André

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