Internal transfer memo review

Question

Hi everyone,

I’m looking for support in reviewing two transfer memos I’m preparing for an internal office move within my firm. This application is important to me, and I want to ensure the narrative is as strong and differentiated as possible, given the competitive nature of the process.

I’m ideally looking for someone who:

Is Manager level or above, preferably with Tier 1 consulting experience
Is comfortable providing direct edits as needed and several rounds of iterations
Has availability to iterate with me and help refine the memos by Wednesday
Charges $100 for their time to help shape this up

Please comment below if interested and I will reach out via direct message.

Thank you in advance!

Answer 1

Hi there,

I am happy to help. I have experience in transfer memos as I myself transferred across two Middle East offices with McKinsey and have helped numerous other colleagues with their transfer memos during my time in McKinsey. Please reach out if you want to chat.

Regards,

Sherif

Answer 2

Hi there

More than happy to hop on a call to discuss this and support you.

Answer 3

Your message is clear, I would just tighten it slightly and make the ask feel a bit more focused and senior. For example: I am preparing two internal transfer memos for a competitive office move and am looking for a Manager level or above consultant, ideally with Tier 1 experience, who can provide hands on edits and iterate with me through several drafts before Wednesday. I value direct feedback and clear positioning support, and I am offering 100 dollars for dedicated review time. If this sounds like a fit, please comment and I will follow up via DM. If you would like, you can also share your current draft and I can help you sharpen the narrative here first.

Alessa

Answer 4

Hey!

If still relevant, DM me to get started. Happy to provide direct edits, iterate quickly, and polish your memo.